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●以下のTOPICについて, あなたの意見とその理由を2つ書きなさい。
●POINTSは理由を書く際の参考となる観点を示したものです。 ただし,
これら以外の観点から理由を書いてもかまいません。
語数の目安は80語~ 100語です。
TOPIC
In some Japanese university programs, students must study
abroad for one year. Do you think university students should study
abroad?
POINTS
● Cost
Work
■Communication

I think that university students should study abroad for the following two
firstly, it is
it is important for
To broaden our perspective.
Studying abroad contributes to knowing a lot of things,
more choice of work
and as
a
result
(
we
Secondly.
Studying abroad.
people beyond borders
For those reasons
can
relationships
makes
us
on ares
should study abroad.
mentioned
have
us
and
one of the critical
happy
because
have
above,
an
we
Can
factors.
interact
I believe that
reasons.
with various
interest in cluture of another countries,
university students
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Answer 1

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zmic

This is well written. 上手に書かれていると思います👍

✅ Firstly, it is important for us to broaden our perspective.

🟠 Studying abroad contributes to knowing a lot of things,
✅ Studying abroad contributes to knowing more about the world,
✅ Studying abroad contributes to our general knowledge,
✅ Studying abroad contributes to our general knowledge of the world,

❓ Secondly, relationships are one of the critical factors.
✅ Secondly, relationships are a critical factor in our personal development.

🟠 makes us happy
✅ is beneficial

❌ cluture of another countries
✅ the culture of other countries
✅ the culture of another country

🟠 have an interest in the culture of other countries
✅ study the culture of other countries
✅ learn about the culture of other countries

✅ Studying abroad is beneficial because we can interact with various people beyond (our) borders and learn about the culture of other countries.
✅ Studying abroad allows us to interact with various people beyond (our) borders and learn about the culture of other countries.

🟠 For these reasons mentioned above, ...
✅ For the reasons mentioned above, ...
✅ For these reasons, ...

I hope this is helpful!

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