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テーマは「5つの中であなたの人生のために最も重要なものは？」です！(ざっくりというと)

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Ⅲ Answer in a short essay between 120 and 150 words in English.
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Which of the following is closest to describing your aim in life? Choose
ONE. Explain with at least two reasons why it is important to you.
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1. To build strong relationships and live for others
2. To be
or career
be successful in
in my business or career
3. To seek personal growth and development of +b20/8
4. To live a healthy and active life
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5. To follow my own dreams, not others' expectations
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とするさらに、直
によっ
1形の面をとする。

I think it is important for
life to be successful
my
a
in my business or career. I have two reasons.
In the first plase, if I succeed in my
Career
1
Place
business or
can earn a lot of money. By doing so,
I can do everything such as going everywhere and
getting everything. It connect with
my
welfare.
Also, if I should suffer from disease, I can spend
I enough money to treat it. I will live with my
healthy body. In the second plase, making it in my
place
business and career will not only achive my happiness,
but also my family too. If my partner know that I'm
family. We will
live happily. Therefore, we should wake effort
precident, he can be proud of arr
to success our job. (120)