Question

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条件
・50～60語
・理由2つ

Do
think
should let their children have their own rooms?
you
parents
A
I think that parents should let their children have their own
rooms.
I have two reasons.
First, they can concentrate on their studies in their own room.
Family members may speak to them on main room.
Second, They can invite their friends in their own room.
It helps them build good relationships with their friend. (35)
2

Answer 1

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Family members may speak to them on main room.
は少し違和感を感じますね。勉強に集中できます！という論点だったので、They won’t be bother by their family.部屋にいるから、家族に邪魔されません。こちらに置き換えた方が良いかもです。

They can invite their friends to their own rooms.の「to their rooms 」と最後のbuild good relationships with their friends. friendsのsを忘れずに！

レイ低浮上気味

ありがとうございます！